Issue 1 Downtime

Name: Alyson Lyn Carmichael

Age: 18

Power: Alyson had the power of flight, and she has the ability to use sonic waves to affect human physiology through songs such as:

Galdr of Hope - A healing spell, so to say, the song restores those around her back to good health, it won't completely heal a fatal wound, but will keep the person from dying.

Aria of the Damned - A spell that causes pain in the recipient. Physically they only receive a nose bleed, but they feel as if something is wrecking their body.


Personality: Alyson has a strong passionate personality. She doesn't care much about the norms of society, and just wants to do her own thing.

Description: Alyson stands at just above five feet, four inches. She weighs in at about 125 lbs. She has long blonde hair, and a petite frame. Her eyes are a heterochromia, one being emerald green color, the other being a bright sapphire blue. A set of dark wings rest on her back, extending out to be about three feet in both directions

Background: Alyson's parents were not very nice people toward mutants, and considered her a poison within their family. When she first obtained her powers, she would fly at night, to stay inconspicuous. Her father spotted the flying person, and shot her down, not knowing it was his own daughter. She was told she was nothing but a monster and was forced out of her home at an early age. Her parents left her at the Xavier Institute when she was only twelve years old. She stayed by herself for a stint, before moving on with her life. She stopped being the good girl, only wanting to be herself. Soon after her arrival at the Xavier Institute she had her brutalized wings restored at least in appearance.

I'm not at all clear what exactly Alyson's mutation is, could you explain more, please.

Her true mutation was supposed to be the ability of flight through space..

This may be a bit pedantic, but I am a little hesitant with the level of incest in terms of multiple mutants from the same family controlled by the same player. I know we have precedents about mutant families (Chloe/Jessica, Rhiannon/Jayda, arguably Jacobi) but in all those cases the characters were originally approved with different players. Rhiannon did change hands to the same player of Jayda, but my understanding is that an arrangement was made to help give Rhiannon a more dramatic exit than simply lapsing into silence.

Personally, given the huge range of possibilities in the Marvel universe, I'd rather see this character have a background completely independent of Sara M. If you'd like to see some siblings/cousins in play, perhaps try recruiting another player to add to the family.

That is not a problem at all. I can easily change her to being independent of Sara M.

Looks simple enough.

Approval 1/2

I have noticed that you have a tendency to take things a bit far in the term of limiting powers and handicapping your characters. While this is by no means a bad thing, understand with a couple of full fledged fliers Alyson is already outclassed by some of the students.

If this is alright with you, feel free to develop the character at your own pace. But I do want to give you a chance to understand that the character could be powered up a bit more and still fit in with the acceptable parameters at XU before I give my approval.

I was not sure exactly how to power her any further...do you have any suggestions?

The first suggestion that comes to mind is to make her wings work. If she was at Xaviers for highschool, she would have had access to regenerative medical treatment.

Hmm... I'm not so sure about that one...that's really a lot of her character..being an example of how cruel some people can still be, even now.

The big thing is that there isn't any good reason why the character wouldn't have been healed already, unless she actively wanted her wings not to work.

If you want to put in the wing-cutting into her backstory, that is fine, but I don't see the need for the permanent handicap, especially since her powers, as written aren't spectacularly useful.

I changed some stuff in the application. When you get chance, please take a look.

Alright. This is actually a pretty neat idea. And I like the core of it. But I think we might want to work a little bit on focusing her songs.

This is just my opinion and other mods may disagree with me, but I think that if you still worked the song angle, but had them just able to effect the physiology of a person through some undefined mechanism, it might work a bit better. Heavens knows we could use another healer character.

Or if you want a more offensive based character, have her able to use songs as weapons. Possibly by being able to turn sound into a tangible attack.

Basically, limit it in one direction or another. As it is, it's a bit busy and there's no clear connection between why her songs work like that.

I was trying to think of stuff that I could do with her, but I was getting a bit jumbled around. I wanted to focus on her being a healer/support but the attack skill just kinda added into it to help a bit offensively.

I like the basic idea, but I agree with Ten that the song power should be a bit more focused.

Alright, modified somethings a bit. How do you feel about them?

I dig it.
Approval 1

Coolbeans. I give you:

Approval 1.5/2

Since there have been some radical changes, I'm gonna ask at least one more mod to sign off on it.

Gives the Evil Brain Stamp of Approval (tm)
((approval 2/3))